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information irrelevant to the paragraph.
474. c. Part 6 is a dependent clause with no independent clause to attach itself to; therefore, it is a
sentence fragment.
475. d. The word wreaked should be replaced in this context by its homonym reeked. Choices a,
b, and c are all incorrect because the indicated words are all used correctly in their context.
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Section 6
Essays
Scoring Criteria
Use the scoring guide below to score each of your essays. Better yet, have someone else read
your essay and use the scoring guide to help you see how well you have done. Sample essays for
the first six essay topics follow this scoring guide.
A ''6'' essay is a highly effective response to the assignment; a few minor errors are allowed. It
has the following additional characteristics:
Good organization and overall coherence
Clear explanation and/or illustration of main ideas
Variety of sentence syntax
Facility in language usage
General freedom from mechanical mistakes and errors in word usage and sentence structure
A "5" essay shows competence in responding to the assigned topic but may have minor errors.
Competent organization and general coherence Fairly clear explanation and/or illustration of
main ideas
Some variety of sentence syntax
Facility in language usage
General freedom from mechanical mistakes and errors in word usage and sentence structure
A "4" essay displays competence in response to the assignment. It has the following additional
characteristics:
Adequate organization and development
Explanation and illustration of some key ideas Adequate language usage
Some mechanical errors and mistakes in usage or sentence structure, but such errors not
consistent
A "3" essay shows some competence but is plainly flawed. Additionally, it has the following
characteristics:
Inadequate organization or incomplete development
Inadequate explanation or illustration of main ideas
A pattern of mechanical mistakes or errors in usage and sentence structure
A "2" essay shows limited competence and is severely flawed. Additionally, it has the following
characteristics:
Poor organization and general lack of development
Little or no supporting detail
Serious mechanical errors and mistakes in usage, sentence structure, and word choice
A "1" essay shows fundamental lack of writing skill. Additionally, it has the following
characteristics:
Organization that is practically nonexistent and general incoherence
Severe and widespread writing errors
A "0" essay does not address the topic assigned.
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SAMPLE ESSAYS, SET 38 (Page 116)
476.
Sample "6" essay
Though it may seem to contradict the ideal of democracy upon which our public school system is
based, requiring public school students to wear uniforms is a good idea. In fact, uniforms would
help schools provide a better education to all students by evening out socio-economic differences
and improving discipline among students.
Style is important, especially to children and teenagers who are busy trying to figure out who
they are and what they believe in. But in many schools today, kids are so concerned about what
they wear that clothing becomes a major distraction even an obsession. Many students today
are too busy to study because they're working after school so they can afford the latest fashions. If
students were required to wear uniforms, they would have less pressure to be "best dressed" and
more time to devote to their studies.
More importantly, the competition over who has the hottest clothes can be devastating to the
self-esteem of students from lower-income families. Because uniforms would require everyone to
wear the same outfits, students from poorer families would not have to attend school in beat-up
hand-me-downs and wouldn't have to face the kind of teasing they often get from students who
can afford Tommy Hilfiger and $150 Reeboks. True, students from wealthier families will be
able to wear nicer shoes and accessories, but in general the uniforms will create an evening-out
that will enable poorer students to stop being ashamed of their poverty and develop a stronger
sense of self.
Contrary to what opponents argue, uniforms will not create uniformity. Just because students are
dressed the same does not mean they won't be able to develop as individuals. In fact, because
uniforms enable students to stop worrying so much about their appearance, students can focus
more on who they are on the inside and on what they're supposed to be learning in the classroom.
Furthermore, uniforms will improve discipline in the schools. Whenever a group of people
dresses alike, they automatically have a sense of community, a sense of common purpose.
Uniforms mean something. School uniforms will constantly remind students that they are indeed
in school and they're in school to learn. Getting dressed for school itself will be a form of
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